Shaun,
Wow, very individual and your design is delightful.
I prefer the tip of the biro at that distance and also believe it is correct because the shape of the tip of the pen if followed matches the angle of the refill coming to a natural point, also it enables the user to see where the tip is beyond the holding fingers a problem in some other kit pens. I believe you capitulated unneccessarily and commend you for your seeing eye, most often first thoughts are best.
The quirky clip breaks up the rounded image of the pen creating both amazement and amusement two very worthwhile characteristics. Thread to tip on the pen is pleasing because some or in my opinion most pens are too narrow in this area, your slight step down suits your pen to a tee.
Grateful you posted, gave me quite a lift for my 78th birthday today Thursday where I live.
Will probably not go far into metals myself with the extra tooling etc since downsizing would
be more sensible for me at this time.
Kind regards Peter.