Hi Toni,
I think you have done a few things very well here. One challenge I see many people have is getting the right colour/material to work with hardware. You need to know the way the two can work together. I love the blue with the gold combinations and the blank is not too busy to take away from the over all look, just the opposite, it adds to the look on this pen.
I will make a comment on the shape that you can accept or not, I think this hardware needs a B2B turning. The strong horizontal lines in the hardware, especially the cap make it look better that way in my mind. I have turned one like yours and after reflection I knocked the pen apart and turned it down in the centre to level the body. I also know that the strong clip needs a straight body to make contact as well[
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I hope my thoughts are constructive for you....beautiful combination, but I think the shape needs some thoughts.
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] Go make another one and see if you can compare them... you're on a good path Toni[
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