For a second attempt, that is WONDERFUL! That pen would not be bad for the 100th attempt. Your fit and finish is spot on. The shape belies the kit. Great job. Do not allow your daughter or especially your wife to get started turning. They will show you up so bad and before you can say 'scat', you will be having to buy yourself a lathe. Just lying, always encourage the young to enjoy and learn the tools. You are doing great. Congratulations. By the way, be sure and read the articles in the library here. The link is at the top of the page. Bunches of info on anything pen related.
Charles